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Friday, 12 February 2016

Minecraft

Once upon a time there lived a boy named Jesse he always wanted to be in the contest where they built cool things with redstone to make their inventions work and the opportunity came up.
“Ok  guys let’s do this!” Jesse said.
Steve said “Do what?”
“Go to the contest where you can build staff” Jessie replied. So they started walking they became know  as The Warriors. There was some other people, they were their enemies. They started building a ender man and behind that was red stone and fire works. The enemies were jealous so the guy got a pick axe and started to smash the cobblestone and the lava started to come out to burn their building. Steve, Alex and Jesse stopped it. Then Reuben (their pet pig) ran away.  While Alex and Steve tried to stop the lava coming onto the building Jesse went to go find Reuben.


It was nighttime and Jesse ‘s anxiousness about the pig grew. His voice echoed across the forest as he turned to different directions, calling the pigs name out three times He went through caves where spiders,creepers,skeletons and zombies lived. He went out and there he saw a camp fire.  He thought that possibly his precious pet Reuben may have been cooked in it. A large sly leave his mouth when he looked at the remains of the file, which showed no evidence of pig, including any bits of the costume he was wearing. His eyes caught a movement of a bush so he checked it out. It was Reuben. Unfortunately, he was surrounded by zombies,creepers, spiders and one skeleton which had a bow and arrow.


Luckily, a girl, ( he later found out was named Petra) appeared out of nowhere, saved him and his pig. She was well known because she was the founder of the nether land. They ran to her secret hideout she had a lot of things. After she showed everything they went to go and cross the bridge. Jesse saw that  they won the contest he was happy. All of a sudden there came creepers they had no choice but to jump off the bridge!


They  were trying to reach to the Coles village. Jesse and Petra made a nether portal with obsidian and flint and steel. When it was completed, they walked into it. They entered The Nether World where there was blazes,ghast and pig mans. Then they found a mine cart. They went inside of it. While they were in the cart Jesse had to protect it. He used his sword to reflect all the fireballs that were coming to them. They had to find a way out so they had to build another portal “lucky I got some spear obsidian and flint and steel. “Hury” Jesse said. The ghast found them the ghast shot fire out of his mouth. Jesse jumped into the portal and Petra did the same thing. Then they were safe they were very close to where the contest was.


Jesse went back to the contest where Alex and Steve were. When Jesse arrived they went back to their tree house. Alex asked “What took you so long?”
Jesse replied “Sorry it’s to hard to explain” and asked “Where is Steve?”  
Alex replied “I don't know?”
Steve popped out with a creeper costume he said “I got you guys ha that's payback”
Jesse replied back “pay back for what?” He said “ummmm? never mind”

Jesse walked and he went to sleep.

I am learning to use the structure of a narrative to write
 and entertain my reader audience. 

4 comments:

Thomas said...
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Thomas said...

Hi Immanuel,
I really like your story, being the mine craft addict that I am. I think that you show quite a lot of aspects of the game such as mobs, animals and players as well as the nether and how to get there. Maybe you could make a sequel in which they fight the ender dragon or the wither. If so, please publish it so I can read. If you want to do it please reply and tell me. Can I borrow the characters and use them to make the sequel if you won't? Anyway, please comment back. I'll bookmark this page. Oops! I just realized a grammar mistake, if you are wondering why it says I deleted the comment

Keep it up,
Thomas

Thomas said...

Hi, me again
I was just wondering to myself, what is steve paying them back for?

Dorothy said...

I love your narrative and I think Thomas has posed some very thoughtful responses and questions.
Mrs Burt

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